[T0G]⇒ Libro Gratis FLOOR 21 eBook Jason Luthor

FLOOR 21 eBook Jason Luthor

Download As PDF : FLOOR 21 eBook Jason Luthor

FLOOR 21 eBook Jason Luthor

Three things would have made this a better story that would have received five stars, quite easily: 1) better editing, 2) dropping the recording narrative and just don't a straight narrative--there are MANY instances where the recording narrative simply doesn't work, and 3) an ending.

Let's start with editing. Compared to a lot of indie published books, this book, which was picked up by Amazon Scout and this is one I voted for to get a contract, is better than average on the editing front. The book isn't in bad shape at all, but there are things that bother me about it that a seasoned editor would have never let slip.

One of those things has to do with #2 as to why this book didn't get a higher rating: the recording narrative. The book is set on the first person premise that the person telling us this story is recording things on some type of an audio recording along the lines of a tablet or MP3 player of sorts, and we are listening to her recordings. This is fine when we see her in her home or bedroom, because that makes sense, but when she's in the air tunnels, there are moments where she even SAYS she has to be completely silent and is trying not to even breathe... uhm, how can she try not to even breathe while also recording? And if she's recording this afterward, then how are we getting the blow by blow? Plus, at one point, she's captured and the recording device is taken away--how is she then still recording to us to read? Then later, when it shifts character's POV, the other character drops his recording device. So I really wish the author would just drop the recording facade and go with straight narrative. If he's needing someone to find these recordings or something years and years later at the end of the final series, then maybe show that the building was video taped like closed circuit or something. But the audio recording doesn't work.

Next, a good editor should have told the author that not having an ending or a real conclusion is just not right. I'm all for series, but I like to have some conclusions to the main storyline, and this book doesn't have that. You'll HAVE to read the next story/book in order to get any conclusion or finality to it. And who knows how long before an author releases the next book? I don't make a habit out of reading half a book and then setting it aside for a year or six moths to come back and finish it.

We're introduced to characters, danger, a plot and an enemy... and then we are left not knowing the fate of any of them by the end of this book. I have more questions now than when I started. I'm just not sure I still trust the author enough to want to pick up the next book. Will that one also not end and I'll continue to be strung along with no resolution at all trying to coerce me into buying the next book? Instead, I would like a conclusion of sorts, with the characters just being open for additional adventures in the future. Let the strength of the storytelling and the writing entice me to buy the next book, but let it be my choice. Coercion by not finishing a story just frustrates me.

That all said, I like the tone and the familiar first person narrative. I like the main character a lot. I like the writing in general too. The style is good. The main character is relatable and believable in the context of where she lives and what she is doing. She's a bit of a tomboy. I am very curious about the conspiracy going on with her parents and look forward to learning more about that. I also like the second protagonist, the male counterpart to our female heroine. I am looking forward to a future installment in which we'll see both characters together and working through her feelings and learning about his feelings about one another.

I am really looking forward to learning more about what the mysterious black substance is and how it's affecting everyone, where it came from, and how long it's been around.

I was intrigued by things like the religious aspects, where the religious artifacts were in the library or conference room, but no one really understood them or knew what they were. They saw a Jesus on a Crucifix, but didn't know who he was or seemed to know what the bible was. The Buddah statue, she called a funny laughing dude. Those types of things were interesting--but I found I had some questions that I think developmental editing would fix, like if they had all those religious books and all the VCR and DVD players and such to see old movies, then why did they not know about God, Jesus, and Buddism? I know they had their own religious texts--where did they come from?

All that said, the concept of living in high rise towers and then having 30-40k people all under one 'roof', so to speak. The solar panels they stole and used for gardening and light--where and how did they get those? People on lower floors don't have solar panels... where'd they come from? The black of the rain, what is it? Is it the same stuff that took over the building?

I have a ton of questions like that. In part, this is great, because it means I'm fully invested in the story and really interested in this universe. I am looking at all the whys and hows of it and find it fascinating. The negative part of that is, I have all these questions, because the author didn't do a very good job in this story of clearing those questions up for me. I hope the author clears this up before the end of the series and I don't end up full disappointed that these questions were never answered.

I honestly struggled with the stars on this one. Truth is, it's a bit closer to the four than it is the three, but because of the lack of ending, I really just can't quite push it to the four mark. That said, I voted for this one in Scout, and I certainly am NOT disappointed in it. I am glad I read it, don't feel like it wasted my time at all, and though I was left with questions and frustrations, I was thoroughly entertained.

It's worth checking out. I just warn you, if you're the type who isn't patient, you might want to wait until the author releases some of the other books in this series before you get started.


Tags : FLOOR 21 - Kindle edition by Jason Luthor. Download it once and read it on your Kindle device, PC, phones or tablets. Use features like bookmarks, note taking and highlighting while reading FLOOR 21.,ebook,Jason Luthor,FLOOR 21,Kindle Press

FLOOR 21 eBook Jason Luthor Reviews

I very much enjoyed this book and I am looking forward to the sequel. The pacing was good for building suspense and I grew to really care about the main character. Lots of room for speculation but with and ending that felt satisfying. Enough questions were answered that I didn't feel like it was all build up and no climax. I highly recommend this to readers of speculative fiction. Also, the female lead was strong, curious and clever, which I always enjoy.
It uses an interesting premise of a vast tower block in which floor numbers start from 1 at the top level and increase downwards where the lowest levels are dangerously infected. It is mainly seen through the eyes of young girl and explores her rather different view on the situation. It also explores drug use, happiness, daring and apathy, where Circus Maximums and a Huxley-like Stratification is used the control people. The ending is vaguely reminiscent of Huxley's Brave New World but with a happier outcome.
I received a free copy of this book after voting for it during the Scout competition. I read it over the course of 3 days, but I have to say...it was a bit of a struggle. I hesitate to leave a review below 4 stars, but maybe it will help the author in future editions...or in future writing.

That being said, I liked SOME aspects of the book. It was an interesting premise, not your usual horror/post-apocalyptic type of story. There's a sufficient amount of suspense even if it is cloaked in a whiny teenager's ultra dramatics. The layers of secrecy kept in place by Tower Authority makes for an interesting backdrop to Jackie's plight.

HOWEVER...and this is where all of my myriad issues arise with having to fight through the reading, there are a lot of things that could have been done a bit better.

1. The editing is a bit lax, though not so much that it threw me too far out of the story. I saw enough mistakes that I started taking note of them before I'd made it halfway through the book. Lots of repetition--recycled phrases seen consistently, even on the same page, sometimes paragraphs apart.

2. The development is rather light. I felt like the author should have taken a moment to REALLY get into this new world and MAKE it new. Jackie uses so much present-day slang that I WAS thrown from the story. I understand she would pick up a lot of things from the DVDs they come across during the Scavenging, but those should maybe have been approached differently. Where is the world building that makes the speech patterns of Tower Pisa's occupants REAL and INTERESTING? Severely lacking on this front, sadly. Also, where the heck do they get STEAK? Unless they're harvesting some hidden cows during the Scavenging, this is highly unrealistic.

3. Jackie felt like a weak caricature to me. She had all the beginnings of BECOMING interesting--inquisitive, brave, and smart--but these were rarely capitalized on, and I felt like the pacing was mired in repetition. She whines about her parents in almost every chapter, pines for Mike in every other chapter, and gripes about her best friend's lack of imagination every two chapters. I think this could have been tightened significantly.

In the author's favor, I was really intrigued to pick up on aspects of Jackie's heritage throughout the story (I'm assuming she's black or Hispanic from descriptions of light brown skin, dark eyes, and super curly hair that knots easily). It's not often I see a main character of color. Now, let me be clear I'm not saying the author needed to play these aspects up to call attention to them, but rather needed to develop her character past the point of the stereotypical teenager. Honestly, I didn't really get sucked into the story until Commander Vick's recordings came up. He's a much more well-rounded character than Jackie, and presents a good counterpoint to her teenage dramatics. I think the story has all the potential to be amazing, but it needs a little further attention.

That being said, I'm kind of curious about the second book. I'm not sure I'd pay for it after my experience with the first, but I'd read it if I came across a free copy.
Three things would have made this a better story that would have received five stars, quite easily 1) better editing, 2) dropping the recording narrative and just don't a straight narrative--there are MANY instances where the recording narrative simply doesn't work, and 3) an ending.

Let's start with editing. Compared to a lot of indie published books, this book, which was picked up by Scout and this is one I voted for to get a contract, is better than average on the editing front. The book isn't in bad shape at all, but there are things that bother me about it that a seasoned editor would have never let slip.

One of those things has to do with #2 as to why this book didn't get a higher rating the recording narrative. The book is set on the first person premise that the person telling us this story is recording things on some type of an audio recording along the lines of a tablet or MP3 player of sorts, and we are listening to her recordings. This is fine when we see her in her home or bedroom, because that makes sense, but when she's in the air tunnels, there are moments where she even SAYS she has to be completely silent and is trying not to even breathe... uhm, how can she try not to even breathe while also recording? And if she's recording this afterward, then how are we getting the blow by blow? Plus, at one point, she's captured and the recording device is taken away--how is she then still recording to us to read? Then later, when it shifts character's POV, the other character drops his recording device. So I really wish the author would just drop the recording facade and go with straight narrative. If he's needing someone to find these recordings or something years and years later at the end of the final series, then maybe show that the building was video taped like closed circuit or something. But the audio recording doesn't work.

Next, a good editor should have told the author that not having an ending or a real conclusion is just not right. I'm all for series, but I like to have some conclusions to the main storyline, and this book doesn't have that. You'll HAVE to read the next story/book in order to get any conclusion or finality to it. And who knows how long before an author releases the next book? I don't make a habit out of reading half a book and then setting it aside for a year or six moths to come back and finish it.

We're introduced to characters, danger, a plot and an enemy... and then we are left not knowing the fate of any of them by the end of this book. I have more questions now than when I started. I'm just not sure I still trust the author enough to want to pick up the next book. Will that one also not end and I'll continue to be strung along with no resolution at all trying to coerce me into buying the next book? Instead, I would like a conclusion of sorts, with the characters just being open for additional adventures in the future. Let the strength of the storytelling and the writing entice me to buy the next book, but let it be my choice. Coercion by not finishing a story just frustrates me.

That all said, I like the tone and the familiar first person narrative. I like the main character a lot. I like the writing in general too. The style is good. The main character is relatable and believable in the context of where she lives and what she is doing. She's a bit of a tomboy. I am very curious about the conspiracy going on with her parents and look forward to learning more about that. I also like the second protagonist, the male counterpart to our female heroine. I am looking forward to a future installment in which we'll see both characters together and working through her feelings and learning about his feelings about one another.

I am really looking forward to learning more about what the mysterious black substance is and how it's affecting everyone, where it came from, and how long it's been around.

I was intrigued by things like the religious aspects, where the religious artifacts were in the library or conference room, but no one really understood them or knew what they were. They saw a Jesus on a Crucifix, but didn't know who he was or seemed to know what the bible was. The Buddah statue, she called a funny laughing dude. Those types of things were interesting--but I found I had some questions that I think developmental editing would fix, like if they had all those religious books and all the VCR and DVD players and such to see old movies, then why did they not know about God, Jesus, and Buddism? I know they had their own religious texts--where did they come from?

All that said, the concept of living in high rise towers and then having 30-40k people all under one 'roof', so to speak. The solar panels they stole and used for gardening and light--where and how did they get those? People on lower floors don't have solar panels... where'd they come from? The black of the rain, what is it? Is it the same stuff that took over the building?

I have a ton of questions like that. In part, this is great, because it means I'm fully invested in the story and really interested in this universe. I am looking at all the whys and hows of it and find it fascinating. The negative part of that is, I have all these questions, because the author didn't do a very good job in this story of clearing those questions up for me. I hope the author clears this up before the end of the series and I don't end up full disappointed that these questions were never answered.

I honestly struggled with the stars on this one. Truth is, it's a bit closer to the four than it is the three, but because of the lack of ending, I really just can't quite push it to the four mark. That said, I voted for this one in Scout, and I certainly am NOT disappointed in it. I am glad I read it, don't feel like it wasted my time at all, and though I was left with questions and frustrations, I was thoroughly entertained.

It's worth checking out. I just warn you, if you're the type who isn't patient, you might want to wait until the author releases some of the other books in this series before you get started.